Death’s Disciple Book One: White Stripe, Dark Deeds by Stella



One lethal bitch of an assassin.

One Rhodes scholar, charter boat deckhand.

One black, inner city, teenage boy with an effed up ‘tude.



The assassin is immortal and possessed.

The deckhand is a disowned New Orleans good ol’ boy. And hot.

The inner city black kid is really a time traveling young black woman.



The assassin doesn’t want friends, attachments, or liabilities.

The deckhand has combat skills and one hell of an education.

The inner city time traveler wants to be immortal. And she wants to kill anyone who pisses her off.

Which is damned near everyone.



The assassin’s 2,000 year old soon-to-be-ex lover.

A eunuch who wants to castrate the inner city, time traveling woman.

And, oh yeah, the deckhand digs the assassin.

And she digs him back. But doesn’t want to.

But can’t help it. But hates it.

You get the drift—but she’d consider doing him.



A sex trafficking charter boat.

A Middle Eastern harem quarters.

Houston’s steamy docks.


Arielle & David: Love the way this is put together like a recipe.  We have seen approximately 1,000,000,000 pitches, and we have never ever seen anything like this.  There’s just so much competition, and so few slots available, anything you can do that makes you stand out, if you do it in a compelling, fascinating and skillful way is going to set you apart from the herd. It makes us think that you are smart, imaginative, outside-the-box writer.  Your pitch, as unorthodox as it is, made us really want to read your book.  What can be improved?  Well, we don’t really get a sense of the plot twists and turns, how the characters change, those kinds of things. It’s hard to get a sense of the arc through the recipe vehicle. We hate to sound like a broken record, but a couple of comparable titles would be great, especially since the pitch is so unconventional.  Also, there wasn’t quite enough of a climax.  Maybe you should add Desert?  After dinner cocktails?