The Book of Jobs: Steve: 2011-2067
by Skye Atman
Note to Apple fans: Steve made a successful transition to The Cloud and is doing well.
His only problem is that his secret plan to get back to Earth immediately and oversee the building of the new Apple headquarters is being thwarted by the Big Guy.
For Steve and the 150,000 others who accompanied him on October 5, 2011, it was an arduous journey to The Cloud. But he loves the design of the place and is thrilled when his hero, John Lennon, meets him at the entrance. His euphoria wanes when he learns the rules and regulations, especially the reincarnation eligibility edict.
Enlisting the help of an eccentric group of geniuses like himself, Steve challenges The Cloud World Order. He fights for his right to Think Different, is befriended by a talented goddess named Siri, sees a therapist, and finds the answers to his questions about death–and life.
This fictional fantasy is based on fact, with fascinating historical details about the colorful characters who live on The Cloud with Steve. Those still on The Earth who read THE BOOK OF JOBS will no longer wonder what he meant by his last words—Oh, Wow. Oh, Wow. Oh, Wow.
Arielle: Fabulous high concept idea! So fun! So funny! And you’ve constructed a great beginning and end. How to make this pitch better: I think the middle has to give a better sense of plot. Not just a reporting of who he’ll meet and a general idea of what he’ll do. After we’ve gotten over how clever the idea is, let us know how you are you to keep us turning the pages.
David: This is such an AWESOME idea for story. Again, that great blend of timelessness and of-the-momentness. Using the Cloud as Heaven smacks of greatness to me. And I love that there’s a “reincarnation eligibility edict.” And that the story hints how Steve Jobs has done things in life that might make him ineligible. And I think it’s very clever and good how you close this pitch with his last words. But I agree that there needs to be more sense of what the story going is to be. How Steve Jobs is going to have to face down his own demons. And I don’t quite see what the consequences are going to be if he doesn’t. There’s not a sense of a villain, of some tension and menace that are going to, if he doesn’t succeed, make the afterlife of Steve Jobs a living hell.