Berta Avila

Wretched Whore: A Ravished Spirit by Berta Avila

“Get over here you wretched whore! We’re going to clean your ass!”-  Mother said. Funny, how she called it cleansing me – yet I always felt so dirty afterwards. Terrified, I shook in my boots, at all of 5 years old – much as I shook in my stilettos a few years later when I turned my first trick.

“♫I dreamed that love would never die,

I dreamed that God would be forgiving”… ♫

Meet Fantine from Les Miserables, with “Sybil” and her insanity, as a side kick. No music, no romance, just a beguiled child, a sociopathic mother, murdered cats, abuse and drama.

Wretched Whore; A Ravished Spirit:  A memoir of innocence betrayed, violation, self-destruction, prostitution and the journey towards spiritual & emotional restoration.

So many are quick to judge and condemn the prostitute, to dismiss and punish the problem child. How many upstanding citizens would gladly eradicate the countless misfits who are labeled insane or unfit for society? They’re thrown away into psychiatric institutions and overcrowded penitentiaries. This memoriesque recollection will shed the light of a different perspective on what leads some, although not all, into “the” life. It’s a story of brutality and the resiliency of the human spirit.

Arielle and David: First of all, we think you’re very brave for telling this story.  It’s a very important subject that needs to be brought out into the open.  The pitch has such a great beginning, it draws us right into the story, with a fantastic piece of harrowing action that makes us instantly sympathize with our main character.  Also love the Les Miserables with Sybil as sidekick descriptor.  It sounds like a story of real inspiration.  What can be improved?  We don’t think that you should use those song lyrics.  It takes us out of the story.  We don’t think the title is quite right, we think it will turn off people.  Yes, we wanna see the darkest part of your story, but we also want to know that there’s going to be light at the end of the tunnel.  And we don’t think that the way you end this pitch is right.  We want to hear your personal story, the details of what happened to you, how this damage affected you as you grew up. We want you to take us inside this crazy world that you lived in and show us the sites, sounds and, yes, even the smells.  But more importantly, we want you to take us inside your heart and your head.  Right now that last paragraph is so much more theoretical, about citizens in society and the human spirit.  We want your story.